Shhhhh.... Let the music play!

My first ever urdu attempt:

Mai taba-e-zindagi
hasrat-e-ameer hon

mai eik adh khilay ghulab ki
khushboo bhari yaad hon

mai ghanay badalon kay peechay
chupa huwa aftaab hon

mai baad-e- mukhalif mai
loh-e-baitab hon

Mai na kabhi urh saki
woh titli-e-haseen hon

Mai jee gaye teri khushyun mai
woh mah jabeen hon